Spring is coming .Look at my neighbourhood.It's beautiful.
Spring's weather is fine.Sun shine is comfortable and wind is kind. 

The trees are tall and grass is green.Many flowers are open.There're yellow,red and pink.The birds whit the Spring coming.They are dancing in the sky or singing song in the trees.
 I like the Spring.

修改后：

Spring is coming. Look around my neighborhood. It's beautiful.
In spring, weather is fine. The sun shines brightly and wind blows gently. The trees are tall and grass is green. Many flowers are blossoming. We can see yellow, red and pink. The birds are dancing in the sky or singing song in the trees. I like the spring.

修改老師：Crystal老師

    初一:黃雨珊

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