Spring is a beautiful season,everything becomes new in it. 　　You can see kites flying in the sky,you can listen to the birds that singing in the sky,and also you can smell flowers in our schoolyard...　　The wind of spring is soft. It blows you as if someone is touching you.It see the river's jumping, the butterfly's dancing and the spring's smiling.　　It often rains in spring.The rain is so thin but long that we even feel the sky is weeping when it is raining. After raining, the sun comes out, the world is washed very clear and we can berath in fresh air again.

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Spring is a beautiful season. In spring, we can see kites flying in the sky, we can listen to the birds singing, and we can also smell the flowers. In spring, the wind is soft. It blows as if someone is touching us. We can see the river jumping and the butterflies dancing. In spring, it often rains. The rain is so light but lasting for such long time that we even feel like the sky is weeping. After rain, the sun comes out. The world is clearly washed  and we can breathe the fresh air. 

修改老師：Crystal老師 

    初一:楊帆

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