劉曉偉老師—中考英語寫作精彩點(diǎn)評與修改（三）
　　中考英語作文題三：

　　有些人認(rèn)為中學(xué)生看電視是在浪費(fèi)時(shí)間，另一些人則認(rèn)為看電視對中學(xué)生是有益的。請你以Is Watching TV a Waste of Time為題寫一篇作文。要點(diǎn)如下：

　　1．一些人認(rèn)為看電視有益，一些人則不這么認(rèn)為。

　　2．你的看法和理由

　　學(xué)生習(xí)作及修改：

　　Is Watching TV a Waste of Time

　　Some people think “watching TV is good for children”, but others think watching TV is a waste of time.
　　From my point of view, television is playing a very important role in our life, so I don’t think watching TV is a waste of time. It can also learn much from it. (We can learn much from it.) Every evening, my grandfather get international news on TV, he wants to know the newest massages of world. （兩個(gè)句子不能用逗號“，”連接，可以合并： Every evening my grandfather watches international news on TV, who wants to know what is happening around the world.）My mother loves animals, she usually watches Animal World. It’s too interesting. (句子合并：My mother loves animals, who usually watches Animal World. It’s very interesting.) I also can learn English or other languages from some programs.
　　Watching TV, I think it is good for us. (I think 作為插入語放在句子的主謂之間。Watching TV, I think, is good to us.) It can help us learn more and more knowledges we never know. (“增加知識”表達(dá)成：enrich one’s knowledge (不可數(shù)名詞)， 可以改成：It can help us enrich our knowledge we have never learned.)

　　點(diǎn)評：

　　寫的比第一篇好，開頭和結(jié)尾經(jīng)過上課的指導(dǎo)都已經(jīng)寫到位了。問題主要出在第二段，在內(nèi)容的表達(dá)上還有待提高。急需改進(jìn)的還是句子的問題：簡單句合并成狀語從句或定語從句的問題。

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